Your legs stretch alphabet
quickly without meaning
And I want to cover you,
feel your body quiet
beneath me.
We will go to
3000 watts of helium explosion
kissing my stomach.
Our bodies oasis.
Shadows mixing in dunes.
I will ride the Sphinx
sand in my hair.
Or in Arctic ice we
will plant our flag.
Your mouth electric
in frozen geometry.
Red runs blue.
2 comments:
word up
intro-- cool
cairo line--cool
oasis as a verb -- fly
last three lines -- didnt do it for me...didnt have the same immediacy or crisp clevernessity the rest had..
maybe its just the last line...
i dont knnooww
the rest is diggity dope though, yo.
I agree with Bri-Bri. For me, it's that word "soul." What is "soul," anyway? Is it like, our immortal souls from CCD and etc.? Or is it James Brown soul? "Soul" as in "Sooooouuuuuuuullll TRAIN!"? Why not, then, say "I will breathe/ James Brown from your fingertips" or "I will breath/ Soul Train from your fingertips."
Personally, I'm more a fan of "I will breathe/ James Brown from your fingertips". But that's me.
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